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The Prevaricators Game by ~khamwon1:iconkhamwon1:



You say it’s our inexorable destiny to be together,
happy until the end of time.                   -Or so you say.
You profess that we will stand robust in most obscure weather,
and that our love will endure time.        -I say that is cliché.

You say: “We are star crossed loves, everyone knows it’s true.”
All I hear: “Blah, Blah, Blah, Blah, Blah.”
You say: “I am so elated that I had the courage to talk to you.”
All I hear: “Blah, Blah, Blah, Blah, and more Blah.”

There is a hint of magic that rolls off of your poison tongue-
It is faintly there, buried deep within your twisted complexity-
For isn’t this all the same shit that you just told the other one?
Don’t take me for a fool, I know all too well of your duplicity.

But I will be direct, sincere, and not let it hide-
You succeeded in making me feel special inside.
©2009 ~khamwon1
:iconkhamwon1:

Author's Comments

100 Themes 66. Traps
So this poem is meant to be taken sarcastically. I have been in a bitter (yet happy) mood this week- and it reflects in the poem.

For some reason I have been really into playing with style and structure...and consonance has been a reoccurring technique in some of my later pieces. (that explains the blah blah blah portion).

The title: "The Prevaricators Game", means the game of a person who lies all the time.

I feel that poem fits the 100 Theme entry because it is ultimately the story of a seducer who tries to trap the narrator with sly words.


OKAY- I usually don't ramble this much....so I am going to shut up and let you comment. Thanks!

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:iconephebiphobe:
It says "advanced critique encouraged," so I'll say this: there's rhyme.. but really no rhythm. It kind of kills a poem for me when people write rhymes without paying attention the the rhythm of the lines. :P
:iconkhamwon1:
I completely understand what you are saying about the lack of rhythm. I realized when composing this piece that many people do not like when rhythm is ignored, and I respect your view. Thank you for your honesty, I appreciate it greatly. Its hard to find people who really give honest critique.

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:iconephebiphobe:
You're welcome. :]

See, if you didn't intend for there to be rhythm.. I guess it works.
(And I guess that just makes it my own problem. hah.)

I'm more irked when poems are (or seem to be) meant for rhythm, but it's uneven. Which I guess isn't the case here? ^^

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